Lana May

Lana sent in two versions of her pantoum – a great example of how changing line order and punctuation allows for subtle variations.

Version 1

Under my fingertips

As the sun rises, as the sun falls,
all that was and ever shall be,
touches me,
touches the earth.

All that was and ever shall be,
all of time.
Touching the earth,
under my fingertips.

All of time,
all of existence,
under my fingertips.
Falling in grains of sand

-all of existence –
touching me.
Falling in grains of sand,
as the sun rises, as the sun falls

Version 2

all of time

Touching the earth,
as the sun rises, as the sun falls,
all that was and ever shall be,
touches me.

As the sun rises, as the sun falls,
all of time
touches me.
Under my fingertips,

all of time,
all of existence.
Under my fingertips,
falling in grains of sand:

all of existence,
all that was and ever shall be.
Falling, in grains of sand,
touching the earth.

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